My best day
I guess that my best day this year was 1 day before halloween this year (2015). I went to a Robotics event, to Instituto Frances de la Laguna. I really thought that it was going to be lame, but it was all the opposite, it was really cool. I saw some cousins and had a good time, I knew a lot of people, from different schools. I had a really good time with my friends. Of course, we had some problems with other guys form other schools, that almost costed the place in the Robotics team for a friend of mine.
Not only that day was really cool, I had a good time in Halloween actually, I dressed as my favorite character, the Joker, yes again. We went to Cesar's house and ate a lot of tacos. I met new people too, it was awesome. We went to a party that we weren't invited to and had a good time.
Diego- This does sound like a cool day! It was definitely all over the place though. I think it would be a good idea to break up your post into different paragraphs so that your ideas are more clear, but don't forget to include transitions.
ResponderEliminarI want to see more description and some of your ideas leave me wanting more (like what did you have a problem with the guys from the other school?) and they could make a really good conflict for your post.
Finally, don't forget how important it is to have some sort of message. Yes, this day was great, but what made it great? Being surrounded by friends, the fact that it was Halloween, eating tacos? I just want to know! And so does everyone else!
Thanks for sharing :)
what about the party you weren't invited, be descriptive, what else happened on that weekend, describe some characters, send us a picture
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